Words that Burn Infinitely By Harish Kothandaraman
on Words that Burn Infinitely
that Burn Infinitely The writing itself is not half bad. Keep going, but you need to put more thought into what it is your writing. I get the impression that writing larger stories might be more in your area, judging from how developed the characters were. Each was introduced so quickly, I barely had time to make an impression of them.
When I did meet them I found them all to be quite "durr" to use slang- boring and unfeeling. There is no emotion in the words , and this doesn't switch from character to character. Third person omniscient is a great, efficient way to tell a story, and to tell all sides of it, however the prose, the rhythm , the language used, what is written, this has to change for the characters if only slightly, or at least the way they speak. Give them distinguishable traits or else they all blend to one mess. You also should fill the words with emotion unless we're reading about robots, and that would be a really good twist on the story.
And why, oh why, oh why oh why oh why, in your right mind, did you think a child finding her
mothers dildo was a plot twist . Just... no. I stated earlier the tone was serious. Not in any way leading up to this comedic masterpiece of a joke.
Your characters were less developed than my right toe , so I would suggest spending time establishing themselves, and an actual plot. This is all the time I want to give to writing this review but all you should take from it is yeah, it sucked, but it's your debut novel. Just keep writing but maybe in secret? Then when your ready to come out, do it right.
P.S.-Please change your amazon bio also, i'm sorry to disappoint, but in no way are you near Shakespeare, Tarentino, or George Carlin. Thanks.
When I did meet them I found them all to be quite "durr" to use slang- boring and unfeeling. There is no emotion in the words , and this doesn't switch from character to character. Third person omniscient is a great, efficient way to tell a story, and to tell all sides of it, however the prose, the rhythm , the language used, what is written, this has to change for the characters if only slightly, or at least the way they speak. Give them distinguishable traits or else they all blend to one mess. You also should fill the words with emotion unless we're reading about robots, and that would be a really good twist on the story.
And why, oh why, oh why oh why oh why, in your right mind, did you think a child finding her
mothers dildo was a plot twist . Just... no. I stated earlier the tone was serious. Not in any way leading up to this comedic masterpiece of a joke.
Your characters were less developed than my right toe , so I would suggest spending time establishing themselves, and an actual plot. This is all the time I want to give to writing this review but all you should take from it is yeah, it sucked, but it's your debut novel. Just keep writing but maybe in secret? Then when your ready to come out, do it right.
P.S.-Please change your amazon bio also, i'm sorry to disappoint, but in no way are you near Shakespeare, Tarentino, or George Carlin. Thanks.